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- Category: Teens
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- Created On: Mar 25, 2007
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1. | Jun 28, 2014
What a good job you were there to look after her and call an ambulance! I liked your use of sound etcfefs, and you used the ellipsis ( ) really well to build up suspense. I also really liked the use of the word spun' a really powerful verb to show how quickly you turned.Have a look again at this sentence now: I put one of my long hands onto the door when suddenly… Can you think of a better adjective for your hand than long'?